Friday, October 22, 2010
Making Changes to Draft
The changes that I intend to make on my essay due to the feedback I received during my writing conference are the following: more control content, context, and choosing a between the blog or the website for my research paper. When I first turned in my essay, I felt really good about it. Up until I went into class and got my evaluations about what I needed to do to improve my essay. I knew I had a problem with rambling when it comes to writing. I don't have structure. Although I tried constructed my essay carefully, I needed to specifically narrow down which web site I wanted to research about, whether it is the World Wildlife Fund overall website or specifically the climate blog within WWF's website. I intend on making an outline of my essay before I start revising my draft about each element of identity I find is key and captivating to a reader and what evidence I have. I need to construct, construct, construct! Outline, outline, outline! I think my essay will have a better flow and a better sense of my direction after I construct and outline my ideas and thoughts.
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I see how Stephanie is trying to relate the composed writing from the blog the characteristics of the organization. Instead of getting the identity of the author, she tries to analyze organization's doing from the blog. Comparing to my research, I try to get characterize the author from his posts.
ReplyDeleteI think your ideas of revision sound very concrete. From the writing conference you have grasped a stronger focus on the construction of your essay. Great job, I'm sure your essay will become an even better product.
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