They Say, I Say relations with revisions

From reading parts 3-4 in the book, They Say, I Say- what I can do to my essay revisions is by connecting all my sentences together and figuring out the flow of my essay.  I can disect each of my sentence and see if I can replace some words with better more descriptive words.  I can use better transitional words, cause-effect words, conclusion words, and comparison-contrast words in order to make my essay a better one.